Hey r/copywriting, I’m sending cold emails to RevOps and GTM leaders to ask for 15 minute interviews as I'm working on building a product in this space. My first version was basically a sales email. It had fake personalization, a problem statement, value prop, CTA, and some social proof. But after getting advice (thanks to people on this sub), I changed the approach. Now I look at each person’s LinkedIn, mostly their About and Experience sections, and try to make the email clearly about them. The goal is to show I actually looked into their background and that I want to learn from their firsthand experience. (Typical email looks like this) Hey ${FirstName}, I saw your Salesforce migration and rollout initiative at ${CompanyName} Returning to ${CompanyName} and working closely with multiple teams to maximize revenue, you've probably seen this. Deals often break because we fail to detect buying signals early enough. I’m working on this problem and would really value learning from your firsthand experience. Would you be open to a 15 minute call next Tuesday at 2pm ET? Thanks, ${My Name} For subject lines, I’m also trying to make them specific to the person. Examples are - Returning to ${CompanyName} - your expertise in CRM ststems - 20+ years detecting risks - 3x exits and scailing beyond A few things I’d love feedback on are... 1/ Does anything still feel wrong with the body of the email? 2/ Are there any practical tips for writing better subject lines for this kind of outreach? (I am having such a hard time writing subjects for my email) 3/ Roughly how many emails like this do people usually send before getting replies? Thanks in advance for your kind advice.   submitted by   /u/whyg0ng [link]   [comments]