Hey guys, I’d appreciate some outside eyes on a long-form sales page I recently rewrote. Quick context: the product is basically an old but rare seduction archive from the early underground days of the pickup scene.. Hundreds of hours of audio breakdowns, psychology discussions, field stories, nightclub dynamics, etc. There was a lot of pickup/attraction products like 10-15 years ago, if you were around in the early 2000s you probably remember some of those sales letters. Absolute insanity 🤣 I recently was looking for some inspo and found the old "Annihilation Method" letter on swiped.co ... looking at it now, its so fking laughable lol. But back then, people were glazing Harlan Kilstein, Frank Kern, and Dean Jackson of "Double Your Dating" fame (iirc). Copywriters took this very seriously! The challenge here was trying to capture the intrigue of that era without sounding like one of those ridiculous old letters. I'm not a "professional", but I understand the basics from casual book reading over the years and trying to incorporate some of the interesting elements of copywriting into product reviews on my site. I’d really appreciate any feedback from people who understand copy. Things like: Does the opening hook work? Does the letter hold attention or drag anywhere? Are the bullets clear and compelling? Does the overall structure make you curious enough to keep reading? One quick warning before the link: there are some NSFW images on the page, so don’t open it at work unless your boss is very open minded. Page here: https://houseofpheromones.com/supreme-attraction/ Curious to hear honest thoughts. I’m especially interested in critiques from people who remember the old PUA era and those legendary absurd sales pages.   submitted by   /u/HouseOfPheromones [link]   [comments]